I created a facebook group - Jack P's Media group thingy - to gather feedback on my work, of which I can post up on there. All group members, of which I invited to join the private group, are of the 16-25 year old age range and fall under the characteristics mentioned earlier in my Audience Profile presentaion. Now that I have a reliable audience of both genders, I can use the constructive criticisms to change and improve my work.
The first impressions on my second draft were mainly positive. However, as I thought would happen, a few suggested that something needed to fill the top left panel. I decided, to further strengthen the key themes explored in the music video - loneliness, isolation etc. - to add more stick figures. These I copied and pasted on photoshop, from one stick figure created by the brush tool, to create many. It also gives the figure on the opposite panel a sense of individualism, which is another key theme of the music video and CD.
Quite like it, on the one square with all the stick men perhaps make one in colour to symbolise escaping like in our video, might work quite well
ReplyDeleteIt matches well with our video too cause the image of you reminds me of a mugshot and the back cover where it says 'No escape' makes me feel as if you are the same as everyone else in a world where anything different is controlled
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